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they come at four o clock on time every day
the say "dont worry, you'll just live here instead"
but what kind of life lives in a hospital bed?
they tell me im alive because thats what i want,
but what if i realy just want to move on?
they wont listen they just say that im fine,
its like they think they can make up my mind

oh save me!
give me one good reason not to let go of me
if you say its wrong, ill ask if its right
to let me lay through all the sleepless nights
be the first to let me know that you love me
and save me by letting me go

they say that im better and i dont need them anymore
so that they can forget about me wasting away alone
but i know you love me, just seeing you gives me hope
let the docter know, of the pain that i cant stand any more

yah save me!
give me your reason for not letting go of me
you say that its wrong but i ask if its right
to let me lay through all these sleepless nights
oh save me, be the first to let me know, that you love me,
and save me by letting me go.

I hold your hand and watch th seconds tick down
you say "at least I know that your a peace now"
tears fall but dont worry, just hold me tight,
and kiss my eyes, say it wont hurt at all...
and dont forget me when i'm gone.
eyes   
©2007-2008 ~lemonseed05
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this is my first song so im not sure if its very good, but im pretty proud of it! please tell me what you think even if its not good. and if any body likes to write music, and would make this into actual music, that would be awsome.
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~lemonseed05:iconlemonseed05: Sep 8, 2007, 3:46:39 PM
i didnt see this befor, but the "eyes" at the end is not supposed to be there and i dont now why it is, :?

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~Chai09:iconChai09: Sep 8, 2007, 3:59:41 PM
oh, how sad, but so sweet. it is very beautifu. the only problem i could find was spelling.

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*kitsuK8:iconkitsuK8: Sep 8, 2007, 4:10:39 PM
o wow! this is pretty good! sad, but sweet. ;d

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~ovs-1991:iconovs-1991: Sep 8, 2007, 8:50:26 PM
dude, brilliant, id love see yah sing this on-stage in front of a million people... keep it comin!

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~thomast67:iconthomast67: Sep 8, 2007, 9:11:22 PM
Whoa! that wuz awesome! I wish I can write lyrics like that=.= I sux at writing. That wuz such beautiful yet depressing words. Do u have some sort of band?<;P lol

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~Dthclaw:iconDthclaw: Sep 9, 2007, 11:56:07 AM
Not bad at all. Could make for a good song, indeed.

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~lemonseed05:iconlemonseed05: Sep 10, 2007, 1:48:29 PM
shutup! u no i cant spell! thanks though! XD

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~lemonseed05:iconlemonseed05: Sep 10, 2007, 1:48:56 PM Mood: Adoration
thank u!!!!!!

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~lemonseed05:iconlemonseed05: Sep 10, 2007, 1:50:10 PM
i so wish i could sing, but so far just writing. but I am looking for a band to play it for me if you know any?...

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